While some people believe that one can leave a dog in a car if you keep a window open, as Orlando Bloom did when he went to a restaurant with Kate Bosworth on a hot summer day, others feel that the dog should remain at home to avoid being subjected to extreme, and possibly lethal, heat.
This sentence contains an agreement shift error. Pronouns used in a similar context should be consistent in both number and person.
The first personal pronoun in this sentence is "one," which is in the third person. The second personal pronoun in the sentence is "you," which is in the second person. The sentence has shifted in person. To correct this error, change the person of one of the pronouns so that they agree.
While some people believe that one can leave a dog in a car if one keeps a window open, as Orlando Bloom did when he went to a restaurant with Kate Bosworth on a hot summer day, others feel that the dog should remain at home to avoid being subjected to extreme, and possibly lethal, heat.
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While some people believe that you can leave a dog in a car if you keep a window open, as Orlando Bloom did when he went to a restaurant with Kate Bosworth on a hot summer day, others feel that the dog should remain at home to avoid being subjected to extreme, and possibly lethal, heat.
Note that in the first corrected sentence, the verb "keep" was changed to "keeps" to agree in number with the pronoun.
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