If you want to boycott Mel Gibson, one should neither see Apocalypto or rent or buy copies of any of his earlier films.
This sentence contains two errors: an agreement shift in pronoun person and an incorrect pairing of correlative conjunctions.
The dependent clause "If you want to boycott Mel Gibson" contains the second person pronoun "you." The independent clause that begins with "one should" contains the indefinite pronoun "one." Both pronouns are used to refer to the same person (in a general sense) and should therefore agree in person.
In the phrase "neither see Apocalypto or rent or buy any of his earlier films," the correlative pronoun "neither" is paired with "or." "Neither" should be paired with "nor."
These versions of the sentence correct the two errors:
If you want to boycott Mel Gibson, you should neither see Apocalypto nor rent or buy copies of any of his earlier films.
If one wants to boycott Mel Gibson, one should neither see Apocalypto nor rent or buy copies of any of his earlier films.
Notice that the verb "want" has changed to "wants" in the second sentence to match the number of the singular indefinite pronoun.
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