During her Confessions tour, Madonna has been using expletives, gesturing offensively toward the audience, and she made disrespectful remarks about the president. However, when her father was in attendance at a concert in Chicago, she left these bits out of her performance.
The first sentence contains an error in parallelism. It lists three things that Madonna did, but two are gerund phrases and one is a clause. Items in a list should conform to a single part of speech.
These are the three items in the list:
- using expletives (This is a gerund phrase.)
- gesturing offensively toward the audience (This is a gerund phrase.)
- she made disrespectful remarks about the president (This is an independent clause.)
To correct the error, change the clause to a gerund phrase.
During her Confessions tour, Madonna has been using expletives, gesturing offensively toward the audience, and making disrespectful remarks about the president. However, when her father was in attendance at a concert in Chicago, she left these bits out of her performance.
"Using," "gesturing," and "making" are all gerunds. This sentence has parallel structure.
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