A group of photographers camped outside Nicole Kidman's home sent their respects to the actress by giving her flowers and singing to her on her birthday. Returning the warm sentiments, a case of beer was sent out to them by Nicole.
The first sentence contains an error in pronoun/antecedent agreement. The second sentence contains a dangling participle.
In the first sentence, the antecedent is "a group of photographers." The prepositional phrase "of photographers" modifies the simple subject "group." "Group" is a collective noun and is singular. The pronoun that refers back to "group" is "their," which is singular. Change the pronoun's number to singular to correct the sentence.
The participial phrase "returning the warm sentiments" modifies the subject of the sentence. The subject in this sentence is "case of beer." The case of beer did not return sentiments; Nicole did. To correct this sentence, and to avoid the use of the passive voice, change the syntax to make Nicole the subject.
These are the sentences with their corrections:
A group of photographers camped outside Nicole Kidman's home sent its respects to the actress by giving her flowers and singing to her on her birthday. Returning the warm sentiments, Nicole sent them a case of beer.
Post a comment